Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart depicts the statistics of physical activity among men and women in different age groups captured in the year 2010.

Firstly, we observe that 52.8% of men aged between 15 and 24 years old perform regular physical activities. Furthermore, this figure drops with age until men hit the age of 45, after which it again starts to increase. However, this trend is quite different when compared to women, who start with 47.7% for the initial age range and then consistently increase with age up until around the age of 55, after which it dips slightly to 53 from 53.3 and then drops sharply to 46.7% for women above 65. Lastly, both genders have almost the same population for regular physical activity, and this could be attributed to their old age, where physical activity becomes non-optional to sustain good health.

Overall, we can conclude that both genders have different trends when it comes to the population performing regular physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the initial percentages and the general trends for both genders. However, the analysis is somewhat uneven. The description of the trends is occasionally confusing, particularly the segment 'dips slightly to 53 from 53.3', which is difficult to follow. Furthermore, the final sentence regarding the similarity of the populations and the reason for it ('non-optional to sustain good health') is an unsubstantiated inference that goes beyond the data provided in the chart. To reach a higher band, focus on reporting the data objectively without adding external opinions or interpretations, and ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the specific age groups shown.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', 'However', and 'Lastly' are used to link ideas, though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The progression of information is generally logical, moving from the younger age groups to the older ones. However, the internal cohesion within the second paragraph is slightly hampered by the awkward phrasing of the data points, which makes the comparison between men and women less fluid than it could be. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing for a clear description of the trends. You use terms like 'depicts', 'statistics', and 'attributed to' appropriately. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances where the phrasing is slightly imprecise, such as 'hit the age of 45' or 'dips slightly to 53 from 53.3'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', rather than relying on simpler verbs like 'drops' or 'increase'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are clear, and the meaning is generally conveyed without difficulty. There are some minor grammatical issues, such as 'the statistics of physical activity... captured in the year 2010' (which is slightly awkward) and the phrasing 'both genders have almost the same population for regular physical activity' (referring to the percentage, not the population). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider variety of complex structures to demonstrate higher grammatical control.

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