Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given chart show the percentage of Australian men and women age groups of physical activity in 2010.
Regarding the highest percentage of age 45 to 54, womens have high ratio which is 53.3 that is greater than the ratio of mens that is 43.1.In term of case we see that, in age of 55 to 64 womans have high rate that is 53 and which is greater than the mens that is 45.1.
In age of 15 to 24, mens have high percentage which is 52.8 that is greater than the rate of womens which is 47.7. If we see on the other hand, in the age of 35 to 44, womens have again high percentage that is 52.5 which is higher than the rate of mens that is 39.5. if we see the age of 25 to 34, womens have high ratio that is 48.9 which is higher than the mens that is 42.2. At the last, the age of 65 and over-than have nearly same percentage, womens have 47.1 and mens have 46.7 percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, but it lacks a clear overview. An effective summary should highlight the overall trends, such as the fact that women generally participated in more physical activity than men in most age groups, with the exception of the 15-24 age bracket. Instead, the response lists data points in a repetitive manner without synthesising the information. The data is generally accurate, but the lack of a concluding summary or a clear introductory overview prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. The writer relies heavily on repetitive sentence structures such as 'in age of X, Y have high percentage which is Z'. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices to link the comparisons smoothly. While the information is presented in a logical order, the transitions between sentences feel forced and repetitive, which limits the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. The writer frequently uses 'high percentage', 'ratio', and 'rate' interchangeably, often incorrectly. For example, 'womens have high ratio' is grammatically awkward and imprecise. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or comparisons (e.g., 'surpassed', 'marginally higher', 'a significant proportion'). The spelling of 'womens' and 'mens' is incorrect; the plural forms should be 'women' and 'men'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with pluralisation ('womens', 'mens') and subject-verb agreement ('The given chart show', 'womens have high ratio'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple or rely on 'which is' clauses. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect usage of commas. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to read, though the meaning remains generally clear.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.