Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, in Australia mostly regular physical activity had done by the women rather than the men of different age.

In detail, men who are 15 to 24 year old had highest ratio was 52.8 percent of daily workout rather than women ratio was 47.7 percent. Women of 25 to 34 age group had 48.9 percent ratio while men had only 42.2 percent of workout. The men and women of 65 and over had a slight difference in ratio of daily exercise. Whereas women stands at 47.1 percent and men stands at 46.7 percent.

Interestingly, women of 35 to 64 had almost same ratio of daily workout. The men and women who were of 35 to 44 shows the ratio of exercise 39.5 percent and 52.5 percent. And the people of the 45 to 54 show the ratio around 45.1 and 53 percent of daily exercise. Finally, the men and women of 55 to 64 showed the ratio around 45.1 and 53 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart and made relevant comparisons. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that women aged 35-44 and 45-54 had a ratio of 52.5% and 53% respectively, which contradicts the visual data provided in the chart. Furthermore, the overview is slightly inaccurate, as the chart shows that men actually participated more in physical activity in several age groups, not women. To improve, ensure that you carefully cross-reference your figures with the source material to avoid factual errors, as accuracy is a key component of Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'In detail,' 'Whereas,' and 'Interestingly' to transition between ideas. However, the progression of information is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the data points are presented in a repetitive manner. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the transition between sentences feels more natural rather than mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You frequently use the word 'ratio' to describe percentages, which is not the most accurate term in this context. Additionally, phrases like 'mostly regular physical activity had done by' are grammatically awkward and lexically imprecise. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'figure,' or 'participation rate,' and ensure you use them in appropriate collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'mostly regular physical activity had done by the women' (passive voice error) and 'men who are 15 to 24 year old had highest ratio' (missing articles and incorrect pluralization). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly the use of articles, prepositions, and correct passive voice forms.

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