Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage male and female from Australia who engaged in daily physical workout in 2010.
Overall, Most female were witnessed to engage in regular physical workout. While the smallest proportion of male were involved. However, highest proportion of male form the age 15 to 24 were involved in exercise. While the small proportion of female from the age group 65 and over.
The highest percentage( 52.8%) of male from the age group 15 to 24 were involved in regular physical exercise during the period, while the 47.7% of women were engaged from the same age group. From the age group 25 to 34, only 42.2% of men were witnessed to engage to it while the for the women was 48.9%. Likewise, the percentage of women surpassed the men proportion and 52.5% of women were engaged in it from the age group
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While the report attempts to summarize the main features of the bar chart, the analysis is incomplete. The response cuts off abruptly in the final paragraph, leaving the data for several age groups unaddressed. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat confusing, as it makes contradictory claims about which gender participated more. To improve, ensure all data groups are covered, provide a clear and accurate summary of the trends, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'While', 'However', and 'Likewise', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that creates confusion rather than clarity. For example, the transition 'However, highest proportion of male...' does not logically follow the previous sentence. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, particularly when referring back to data points. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices more precisely and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical flow that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There is repetitive use of phrases like 'engaged in' and 'involved in'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'daily physical workout' (the prompt specifies 'regular physical activity') and 'the for the women' which is grammatically incorrect. There is also a lack of sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends or comparisons. To improve, try to use a wider range of synonyms and ensure that collocations are accurate, such as 'participated in' or 'levels of physical activity'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the percentage male', 'the smallest proportion of male'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary components, such as the final sentence which is incomplete. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with articles and pluralization, and ensure that all sentences are complete and correctly punctuated before attempting more complex structures.
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