Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph compares the proportion of Australian men and women who did regular body exercise based on their age group in 2010
Overall, during teenage and early adulthood males were more engeneratic and did more physical work than the female. In contract, as the age goes up like from mid-twenties to old age female were most active physically then males in 2010.
In 2010, the age group of 45 to 54 females were accounted for 53.3% as compare male of 15 to 24 age group accounted for 52.8%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 89 words. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify some trends, the analysis is extremely brief and lacks a comprehensive overview of the data provided in the chart. Key features are not adequately reported, and the comparison is limited to a single specific data point rather than a broader summary of the trends across all age groups. To improve, the student must provide a more detailed description of the data, ensuring all age categories are covered and the main trends are clearly highlighted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into short paragraphs, but the lack of sufficient content makes it difficult to assess the logical progression of ideas. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'In contrast', but the transitions are somewhat mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the brevity of the text prevents the development of a coherent argument or a structured report. To improve, the student should focus on grouping data logically and using a wider range of linking words to connect sentences and ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains errors that affect clarity, such as 'engeneratic' (likely meant 'energetic') and 'physical work' (which is imprecise in the context of physical activity). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of proficiency. The student relies on basic phrasing, and the word choice is often inaccurate or awkward. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description and physical activity, such as 'participation rates', 'sedentary', or 'age-specific trends'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'females were most active physically then males' (should be 'than'), 'females were accounted for' (incorrect passive voice usage), and 'as compare male' (incorrect prepositional phrase). The sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with little evidence of complex sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, the student needs to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and the development of more complex sentence structures to demonstrate grammatical control.
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