Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in different age gaps who did regular physical workout in 2010.

Overall, the females whose age between 25 to 65 and above were doing more physical activities than men but the in 2010, the men whose age between 15 to 24 did more physical workout then female.

In 2010, Australia showed that men whose age between 15 to 24 were doing more physical activities around 52.8% then female about 47.7%.By contrast, the age between 25 to 44 women done more physical fitness about 48.9% to 52.5% than men whose proportion was around

On the other hand, the age group between 45 to 64 again females done more physical workouts than men. But in 2010 Australia demonstrate that women having age group between 65 and above were doing slightly more physical exercise of around 47.1% then men whose percentage was around 46.7%.

As a result, the proportion of female was increased then men in physical workouts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart and provided comparisons between the age groups. You covered all categories (15-24, 25-44, 45-64, and 65+). However, the report lacks a clear overview of the data trends, and some of the data points are slightly inaccurate or incomplete, such as the missing percentage for the 25-44 male group. To improve, ensure that your summary highlights the most significant trends—such as the fact that women generally participate more in physical activity across most age groups—rather than just listing statistics. Ensure all data points are clearly stated to avoid ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'By contrast', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the final sentence, 'As a result, the proportion of female was increased then men', is a weak conclusion that does not effectively synthesize the preceding information. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'proportion', 'physical activity', and 'age group'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'age gaps' instead of 'age groups', 'physical workout' used repeatedly, and 'women done' instead of 'women did' or 'women engaged in'. The misuse of 'then' instead of 'than' is a recurring error that impacts the precision of your comparisons. To reach a higher band, focus on using more varied synonyms and ensuring correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'women done'), incorrect preposition usage, and confusion between 'then' and 'than'. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles, such as 'the age between 25 to 44 women done more'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your report. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like 'then/than' will significantly improve your score.

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