Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart that shown in the figure it's represents the percentage of Australian population in different age groups who did workout daily in their lives.
Graph shows the age group 15 to 24 in both female and male are more likely to do more physical work from all age groups. And also men do more workout then females.In women the period of 65 to over do less physical work as compared to other age of women. Moreover Men hustle decrease in the age between 35 to 44.
Overall men do less workout in their middle era of life and women do more workout in that span.Males are less focus at The age if 35 to 44 whereas females focused in that span.In meanwhile Women do less physical hustle in the age of 15 to 24 and men are more motivated then women in that time.In the age of 65 and onward both do less exercise.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and there are significant inaccuracies in the interpretation of the data (e.g., stating that men do more workout than females in all age groups, which contradicts the provided chart). The lack of specific data points or percentages makes the summary vague and ineffective. To improve, you must identify the key trends and support them with specific figures from the chart, ensuring that your comparisons are factually accurate based on the visual evidence provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and repetitive. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect manner, such as the repetitive use of 'In the age of' and 'In meanwhile'. The progression of ideas is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the age groups. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus, such as grouping data by gender or by age trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'middle era of life', 'hustle', and 'workout daily' are informal or imprecise. There is a lack of variety in the language used to describe trends, and the repetition of basic words hinders the quality of the response. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuate', 'decline', and 'significant', while avoiding colloquialisms like 'hustle' or 'workout'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The chart that shown', 'Graph shows'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors, such as 'In the age of 65 and onward both do less exercise.' To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the appropriate use of articles, before attempting more complex structures.
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