Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart underneath indicates the percentage of Australian male and female in separate age who did daily physical undertaking in 2010.

In this summary, the percentage of Australian men and women regular physical activity and the male and female percentage of teenagers are maximum half century and younger millennial are maximum half century. The early middle age are two quarter distance and late middle age are one quarter distance.

The mature working age are half quarter distance and olders adult are maximum same.

In this explanation, the percentage of Australian men and women regular physical activity : 2010. The percentage of man in 15 to 24 age group are 52.8 and women are 47.7. The percentage of male in 25 to 34 age group are 242.2 and women are 48.9. The percentage of gents in 35 to 44 age group are 39.5 and ladies are 52.5. The percentage of men in 45 to 54 age group are 43.1 and women are 53.3. The percentage of male in 55 to 64 age group are 45.1 and female are 53. The percentage of gents in 65 age group are 46.7 and ladies are 47.1.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear summary of the main features. The overview is confusing and lacks clarity, using vague phrases like 'maximum half century' which do not accurately describe the data. Furthermore, the data reporting is inaccurate; for instance, the figure for the 25-34 age group is cited as '242.2', which is impossible for a percentage. The response lacks a logical selection of key features and comparisons, resulting in a list-like presentation of data that does not effectively highlight trends or significant differences between genders or age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'The percentage of...' to start almost every sentence. The lack of logical flow between the overview and the body paragraphs makes the text difficult to follow. Referencing is also unclear, as the relationships between the age groups and the data points are not explicitly linked, leading to a lack of overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing and makes several word-choice errors, such as using 'undertaking' instead of 'activity', 'gents' and 'ladies' instead of 'men' and 'women', and 'olders adult' instead of 'older adults'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). The inaccuracies in reporting figures also suggest a lack of control over the language required for data interpretation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The percentage... are 52.8') and pluralization (e.g., 'separate age', 'olders adult'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of colons and periods. While the meaning is generally discernible despite these errors, the lack of complex structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical mistakes significantly limit the quality of the writing.

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