Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart compares percentage of Australian men and women regular physical activity across 6 different age groups people in the year 2010.

Looking first at the larger figures , for female age group 45 to 54 and for men 15 to 24 age group was the biggest category at 53.3 percent and 52.8 percentage on the following order. On the contrary other age group had mostly women doing more physical activity than a men, people who were between 45 to 54 female were more physically active at 53.3 percent and men at 43.1 percent.

Secondly, age group 55 to 64 female regular physical activity at 53 percent and male at 45.1 percent. Furthermore it waas significant that only age group where male were more physically active than a female and with other age group it was contrast.

Overall, for men 15 to 24 ag group had the highest percentage, whereas for female it was 45 to 54 age group. It is significant that,there was a considerable difference between highest and lowest figures in both categpory people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, such as the peak age groups for both genders. However, the report lacks clarity in its comparisons. For instance, you mention that 'other age groups had mostly women doing more physical activity', but the data shows this is not consistent across all groups. Additionally, the statement that the 15-24 age group for men was the 'biggest category' is slightly confusing as it is presented alongside female data. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurate and that you clearly distinguish between the trends for men and women. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated to highlight the most significant trends rather than just repeating specific figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as the transition 'Secondly' which does not follow a clear logical progression from the previous paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when you refer to 'other age group' or 'with other age group it was contrast'. The flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, making it difficult to track the comparison between genders. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to the correct subjects would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use basic terms like 'figures', 'category', and 'percentage'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'on the following order' instead of 'in the following order' and 'it waas significant' (spelling error). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'marginal difference'. You should also focus on accuracy in spelling and word formation to ensure your writing appears more professional and polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'age group 55 to 64 female regular physical activity' is missing a verb) and incorrect article usage (e.g., 'than a men', 'than a female'). There are also punctuation errors, such as the missing space after the comma in 'significant that,there'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small grammatical slips will help improve your accuracy.

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