Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph compares the percentages between men and women in Australia, doing physical activity on regular basis in 2010.
Overall, the females dominated the male in most of the age group categories. The highest figure recorded was by female aged 45 to 54, 53.3%. The least were male in between 35 to 44 with 39.5% of regular fitness in 2010.
On one hand it is noticeable that, male aged 15 to 24 were mostly fitness oriented with 52.8% of regular physical activity. Females aged 25–64 recorded higher rates of physical activity than their male counterparts in 2010.
On the other hand, Most of the male are holding least regular physical activity when compared to female in 2010. The older male category (65 and over ) were able closely match the regular physical activities with female, only with some percentage difference in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some key features, such as the highest and lowest figures, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have not fully compared the data across all age groups, and the summary lacks a clear overview of the trends. To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the chart and provide a more comprehensive comparison between genders. The under-length nature of the response means that the task is not fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand', which are not used effectively to contrast the data. The progression of ideas is present but could be smoother. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical flow between sentences could be improved to better connect the comparisons being made.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher bands. Phrases like 'doing physical activity on regular basis' and 'mostly fitness oriented' are slightly unnatural. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'regular physical activity'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied synonyms and precise collocations related to data reporting, such as 'participated in', 'engaged in', or 'a significant proportion of'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'females dominated the male' should be 'females dominated the males', and 'The least were male' is grammatically incorrect. There are also issues with article usage and pluralisation, such as 'Most of the male are holding'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score.
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