Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart depicts the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in the year 2010.

Overall women have recorded more participation in the physical activity for every age group except for the 15-24.

The highest percentage of men participating in physical activity was 52.8 percent of the age group 15–24. After that, there was a slight decline in the percentage of men participating in physical activity, with the lowest figure being 39.5 percent of the age 35–44. After reaching this low point, the figure gradually increased to 43.1% among 45–54-year-olds, 45.1% among 55–64-year-olds and 46.7% among those aged 65 and over.

Women showed higher participation in physical activity as the age group increased, reaching the highest percentage of 53.3% among those aged 45–54. While the lowest recorded percentage was 47.7 amongst 15-24 age group.

65 and over is the only age group which has recorded almost identical percentage of men and women participating in the physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response effectively identifies the main features of the data, such as the overall trend of women participating more than men and the specific age-group fluctuations. You have successfully selected key data points to support your summary. However, the overview could be more comprehensive; while you mention that women participate more, you could also note the general trend that participation rates for both genders do not follow a strictly linear path. The comparison between genders is clear, and the data is accurately reported. To reach a higher band, ensure that all significant trends are highlighted in the overview, rather than just one.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding observation. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'After that' and 'While', to link sentences. However, the cohesion is occasionally a bit mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the transition between the description of men's participation and women's participation is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the information is grouped logically by gender, which helps the reader navigate the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, including terms like 'depicts', 'participation', 'decline', and 'gradually increased'. The language is generally precise and appropriate for an academic report. There are no significant spelling errors, and the word choice is accurate. To achieve a higher band, you could incorporate more sophisticated collocations or less common lexical items related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'marginal', or 'pronounced', to demonstrate a wider and more flexible range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response shows a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are error-free, and your control of grammar is generally strong. There are minor issues, such as the phrasing 'the age 35–44' (should be 'the 35–44 age group') and 'the 15-24' (missing noun). Additionally, '65 and over is the only age group which has recorded' could be improved to 'The 65 and over category is the only age group that recorded'. Despite these small slips, your meaning is always clear, and the grammatical errors do not impede communication.

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