Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The below chart shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups and who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Firstly, In 2010, percentage of Australian men and women doing physical. Age of 15 to 24, there are 52.8 % men and 47.7% women doing regular physical activity and age of 25 to 34 people, there are 42.2% men and 48.9% women are doing regular physical activity. moreover, 35 to 44 age group people doing regular physical activity of 39.5% men and 52.5% women in 2010.

Secondly, age of 45 to 54 people doing physical activity in 2010. Further more, 55 to 64 age group people in Australia, there are 45.1% men and 53% women doing regular physical activity and lastly, 65 and over age group in 2010 doing physical activity regular not big different for men and women 46.7% men and 47.1% women.

On conclusion, The highest percentage of the men doing regular physical activity in 2010 and the age of 15 to 24.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the age groups and gender comparisons. However, the information is presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive summary. The overview is missing, as the conclusion provided is inaccurate and does not reflect the overall trends. Some data points are missing (e.g., the 45-54 age group data is mentioned but no figures are provided), and the comparison between genders is inconsistent. To improve, you should provide a clear overview of the main trends and ensure all data points are accurately reported and compared.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', but these are used mechanically and do not always lead to logical progression. The paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, often feeling like a disjointed list of statistics. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping information logically—perhaps by comparing trends across age groups—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'doing regular physical activity' and 'age group'. There is little attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated academic vocabulary to describe trends or data. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'not big different', which should be 'not a significant difference'. To improve, try to vary your language by using terms like 'participate in', 'engage in', 'proportion', or 'percentage', and use comparative adjectives to describe the differences between the groups more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'Age of 15 to 24, there are 52.8 % men', which lacks a proper subject-verb connection. Articles are frequently omitted (e.g., 'percentage of Australian men'), and there are errors in preposition usage and word order. The range of structures is limited to simple sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles and prepositions correctly.

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