Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE BAR CHART REPRESENT THE PERPOTION OF AUSTRALIAN INDIFFERENT AGE GROUP SUCH AS MEN AND WOMAN WHO DID DAILY EXERCISE IN 2010.
OVERALL, IT CAN SEEN THAT , THE PERPOTION OF MEN HIHSET IN 15 TO 24 AGE GROUP AND THAT LEST PER[OTION IN 35 TO 44 IN AGE GROUP, HOWEVER FEMALE ALSO HIEHER IN 35 TO 44 IN AGE GROUP AND DOWNFALL IN 65 AND OVER AGE GROUP.
TO BEGIN, THE MEN AGE GROUP WERE DIVIDED IN DIFFERENT AGE GROUPS BUT ITS HIHEST PERPOTION IN 52.8 % OF 15 TO 24 MENS . MOREOVER, TWO AGE GROUP OF MENS LIKE 25 TO 34 AND 45 TO 54 WERE SAME PERPOTION OF 42.2% AND 430.1%, AND THAIR LOWEST RATIO IS 39.5% IN 35 TO 44 AGE GROUPS.
ON THE OTER HAND, FEMALES HAD HISHEST IN PERPOTIN IN 53.3 % IN 45 TO 54 AGE GROUPS AND IT LOWEST PERPOTION OF 47.1% IN 65 AND OVER AGE WOMENS. FUTHERMORE, THE AGE GROUP OF 35 TO 44 AND 45 TO 54 IS EQUAL PERPOTION OF 53 % AROUND.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you state the lowest proportion for men is 39.5% in the 35-44 age group, but the chart shows different trends. Furthermore, the data points provided (e.g., 430.1%) are clearly erroneous and confusing. While you attempt to make comparisons between genders and age groups, the lack of precision in interpreting the figures makes the summary unreliable. To improve, focus on accurately transcribing the data from the chart and ensuring that comparisons are based on correct numerical evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin' and 'On the other hand' to signal transitions. However, the logical progression is often disrupted by the inaccurate data and unclear sentence construction. Referencing is sometimes confusing, such as when you refer to 'two age group of mens' without clearly linking the data points. The flow between sentences is mechanical rather than fluid. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus supported by accurate information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede understanding (e.g., 'PERPOTION' for proportion, 'HIHSET' for highest, 'INDIFERENT' for in different). You rely on basic descriptors and struggle to use precise terminology for describing trends or data. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To improve, you must prioritize learning the correct spelling of key academic terms and expanding your vocabulary related to describing charts, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the message. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart represent'), pluralization, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'THE MEN AGE GROUP WERE DIVIDED IN DIFFERENT AGE GROUPS' is redundant and grammatically weak. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word form.
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