Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart Illustrate the human of austrelian doing regular physical activity and it measured in percentage.

Overall, The bar chart shows information about man , female, his/her age group as well as also porovide percentage of austrelian men and woman doing physical activity in 2010.

In 2010 The age group of 15 to 24 of men and female are regular physical activity which persentage is 52.8 for man and 47.7 female. but about the age group of men and female of 35 to 44 is men are irregular for Their fitness is perxentage is only 39.5 of men and in female is 52.5 perecent is regualr.

But as well as When age group of 55 to 64 only 45.1 percent of men is doing Their activity but as we can see female is 53 percent is active in their fitness. last but not in the list The age group of 65 and over as we can see 46.7 perfect of man and 47.1 [ercent of female are doing regular activity.

as The bar chart It is clearly shows that only female are doing regular physical activity compare to men of 2010 in austrelia. females are more active then males of austrelia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it mentions some figures, the selection of data is inconsistent and lacks a logical comparison between the age groups. The conclusion provided is inaccurate, as the data does not support the claim that 'only females' are active or that they are universally more active than males across all categories. The response lacks a clear focus on the most significant features, such as the peak activity levels or the clear gender gap in specific age brackets, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as the repetitive use of 'as we can see' and 'but as well as'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the age groups. The structure lacks a cohesive flow, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt or confusing, which hinders the overall readability of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'doing' and 'activity'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'austrelian', 'porovide', 'persentage', and 'regualr'. These errors, combined with the misuse of words like 'human' instead of 'proportion' or 'percentage', significantly impact the clarity of the report. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the data with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'The bar chart Illustrate' and 'men... is irregular'. Sentence structures are largely simple and often fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'last but not in the list The age group of 65 and over as we can see 46.7 perfect of man'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with random capitalization and missing commas, which further detracts from the accuracy of the writing.

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