Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chat demonstrate the percentage of Australian men and women in different age of groups who did regular exercises 2010.
Overall, it shows that the male proportion from the age between 15 to 24 is 52.8% that is a huge percentage among the others groups and the women make 47.7% then the men of the group 35 to 44 make least part in exercise that is approximately 40 %.Accept the first group, in all groups female make the lead in physical activities.
Take starts from the group 15 to 24 male make 52.8% beside this female make 47,7%.Next, take the group 25 to 34 the male take 42.2% and female gets 48.9%.The group 35 to 44 ,male did 39.5% and women take part 52.5%.
The significant part of this group is the female take the lead in this that is 53,3% and male did 43.1%.In the next group female take lead in nearly 53 %.and the group 65 and over remain approximately same
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the high participation in the 15-24 age group and the general trend of women participating more than men. However, the reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesising them into a clear analytical summary. Some data points are unclear, such as the reference to the 65 and over group, which is not fully explained. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping the data more effectively to highlight trends and comparisons rather than listing figures for each age bracket individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'take' and 'make'. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') would help the reader follow the comparison between genders more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'make', 'did', and 'take'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'make the lead' instead of 'take the lead' or 'outperform'. Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'the male take 42.2%'. To improve, you should aim for a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'proportion', 'participation rate', 'surpassed', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the bar chat demonstrate'), missing articles, and incorrect punctuation (e.g., '47,7%' instead of '47.7%'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation hinders the flow and clarity of the report.
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