Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in various age groups who play the different physical games or activities.

This bar chart show the Australian people who have done physical exercises on daily basis. The percentage showed highest trend was followed by men with above than 50 percent and women around the less then 50 percent. Light gray color is used for males and dark gray shade for women. As we see that the least group of people was nearly 40 percent of men and women was 50%.

The graph display the regular activities who people done in 2010 that was consider both men and women. The diagram contain various age groups that was start 15 to 24 and till end end the group of 65 and above.

Secondly, on the left side percentage is given of Australian men and women. The perfect match was the group of 65 and above with both men and women were equally and less than 40 percent. Similarly, some groups like 35 to 45 and 45 to 64 was the time when women have above 50 percent but men was about nearly 40 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing the bar chart, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The summary is confusing, with inaccurate statements such as 'the least group of people was nearly 40 percent'. The comparison between age groups is poorly executed, and the data points mentioned do not align with the provided chart. The response lacks a clear selection of main features, and the information provided is often contradictory or unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand the trends in physical activity across the different age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. There is a lack of clear transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the misuse of 'Secondly' to start a paragraph that does not follow a 'Firstly'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall structure does not effectively guide the reader through the data. The flow of information is disjointed, which hinders the clarity of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'physical games' instead of 'physical activities' and 'above than 50 percent' instead of 'over 50 percent'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical data, relying on basic phrasing that lacks the sophistication required for an Academic Task 1 response. Some vocabulary is used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This bar chart show', 'The graph display'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'that was start 15 to 24'). The use of complex structures is attempted but is consistently inaccurate, leading to confusion. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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