Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart below illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, Australian men within the age group of 15 to 24 accounted for the highest percentage, while those within the the age group of 35 to 44 made up the lowest share. By comparism, Australian women within the age group of 45 to 54 accounted for the higest figure while the women within the age group of 65 and over represented the lowest percentage.

Regarding the Australian men, those within the age group of 15 to 24 accounted for 52.8% which represented the highest percentage of men who engaged in regular physical activities.  Australian men who were 65 and over represented 46.7% which made up the second highest proportion, followed by 55 to 64 which represented 45.1%.  Age group 25 to 34 and 45 to 54 was only 42.2% and 43.1% respectively. Australian men within 35 to 44 years accounted for the least proportion.

By comparism, Australian women within the age group of 45 to 54 made up 53.3% which accounted for the highest proportion of women who participated in regular physical activity, followed by 55 to 64 which made up 53%.  Age group 33 to 54 years and 25 to 34 was only 52.5% and 48.9% respectively. Age group 65 and over accounted for the least figure at 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the data and provided relevant comparisons. You covered all age groups and genders, and the overview clearly highlights the key trends. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you mention 'Age group 33 to 54 years' which does not exist in the chart, and the data points for the 25-34 and 45-54 groups for women appear to be misread or mislabeled in your summary. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are transcribed with absolute precision and that labels are consistent with the provided prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Regarding the Australian men' and 'By comparism' to transition between ideas. However, the term 'By comparism' is non-standard; 'In comparison' or 'Conversely' would be more appropriate. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the data for men and women, which helps the reader follow the information. The progression of ideas is generally clear, though the repetitive sentence structure in the body paragraphs makes the flow feel slightly mechanical at times.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accounted for', 'engaged in', and 'proportion'. There are some spelling errors, such as 'comparism' instead of 'comparison' and 'higest' instead of 'highest'. Additionally, the repetition of phrases like 'accounted for' and 'made up' limits your lexical flexibility. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'constituted', 'represented', 'a significant share', or 'the peak figure', to avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the the age group' (repetition) and 'Age group 25 to 34 and 45 to 54 was only' (subject-verb agreement error, as the subject is plural). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structures are somewhat formulaic. To achieve a higher band, focus on reducing minor errors and varying your sentence construction to include more sophisticated subordinate clauses.

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