Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart represents the proportion of Australian men and women in multiple age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, it is evident that female was the more active than male apart from the youngest. Furthermore, the group of ages (65 and over) showed similar percentage of male and female.
To begin with, the percentage of Australian men and women doing physical activity at the age group of 15 to 24, accounted for 52.8%, and 47.7% respectively.
In contrast, the proportion of another age groups of men and women experienced higher activity rate. For instance, 25 to 34 ages group people 48.9% female are active compared to 42.2% male. Moreover, another group showed similar trend. Similarly 45 to 54 age group people 53.3% female active compared to 43.1. The age group of 65 and over illustrate male and female are approximately similar. Men accounted for 46.7 and women accounted for 47.1, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, including the overall trend and specific comparisons. However, the reporting of data is somewhat inconsistent and lacks precision. For example, the statement 'female was the more active than male apart from the youngest' is a good summary, but the subsequent data descriptions are slightly disjointed. The mention of 'another group showed similar trend' is vague and fails to clearly identify which age groups are being referenced. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to their respective categories and that the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the key differences and similarities across all age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'For instance', and 'Moreover' are used to connect ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'another group showed similar trend' without specifying which group. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is functional, but the overall progression could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that every reference clearly points to a specific group or data point would enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey the main points. There are some attempts at using specific terminology like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'activity rate'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'female was the more active than male' (should be 'females were more active than males') and '45 to 54 age group people 53.3% female active' (which is grammatically awkward). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on repetitive structures. To improve, focus on using more precise nouns and adjectives to describe the data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'female was the more active' and 'the group of ages'. Additionally, the sentence 'Similarly 45 to 54 age group people 53.3% female active compared to 43.1' is incomplete and lacks a clear verb structure. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of the report. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for pluralisation and verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy.
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