Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of men and women working out in different age groups in Australia in 2010.

overall, the amongst all the age groups women were more physical active than men except for 15 to 24 age group in which men were more active.

From the 15 to 24 till 35 to 44 age group the percentage of men who regularly had a physical activity were decreasing by each group. In 15 to 24 the percentage of men working out was 52.8% which dropped to 42.2% in 25 to 34 age group followed by the lowest percentage of 39.5% in 35 to 44, whereas women had a lower percentage in 15 to 24 age group with a percentage of 47.7% which increased in the next group by 1.1% and by 35 to 44 group the percentage was 52.5% with an increase of 3.7%.

By 45 to 54 group women had the highest percentage at 53.3% which started to decrease over the next group by 0.3% and were at their lowest at 47.1% in the group 65 and over. Men in the ages between 45 to 54 started to be more active then the previous group at 43.1% which increased the next group by 2% and by 65 and over age group the difference between men and women was only 0.4% with 46.7% men with a regular physical activity and women at 47.1% with regular physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task well. You have identified the main features, such as the overall trend of women being more active and the specific age-group comparisons. The data is used effectively to support your points, and the overview is clear. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with complete accuracy; for instance, the description of the 15-24 age group for men is clear, but ensure that comparisons between genders are consistently highlighted throughout the report. You have successfully selected and reported the main features as required by the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organised with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. You use cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'followed by', and 'in contrast' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing could be improved for better flow; the transition between the second and third body paragraphs is slightly abrupt. Additionally, some cohesive devices are used in a repetitive manner. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a distinct trend or comparison would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'percentage', and 'regular physical activity'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'working out' (which is informal for an academic report) and 'more physical active' (should be 'more physically active'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that adjectives and adverbs are used correctly. The current range is sufficient to convey your meaning, but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the amongst all the age groups' (unnecessary 'the'), 'had a physical activity were decreasing' (subject-verb agreement), and 'started to be more active then' (should be 'than'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips throughout. To achieve a higher score, focus on eliminating these small errors and increasing the variety of complex sentence structures, ensuring that your subject-verb agreement is consistently accurate.

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