Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian of both gender male and female across different six age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010, measured in percentages.

Overall, it is evident that the percentage of females generally had the higher participation rates than males across six age groups, expect in the 15 to 24 age category where males recorded the highest percentage.

Firstly, in the age 15 to 24 age group, males had the highest participate rate at 52.8%, compared to 47.7% for females. However, from age 25 onwards, female participate exceeded male participation in almost every category, peaking at 53.3% in the 45 to 54 age group. In contrast, the percentage of active males dropped to its lowest point of 39.5% among those aged 35 to 44 before slightly rising in older age groups.

secondly, in the 55 to 64 age group male participation of 45.5% but female for 53% . Similarly, 65 and over the age group of gender was similar regular activity (46.7% and 47.1%) in the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully identifies the main features of the bar chart, including the overall trend and specific comparisons between genders across age groups. You have highlighted the key exception in the 15–24 age group and noted the peak for females in the 45–54 category. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are clearly linked to their respective categories. For instance, the final sentence is slightly disjointed and lacks a clear comparison for the 65+ group. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data is presented with precision and that the overview clearly synthesises the main trends rather than just listing figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'However', and 'In contrast' to guide the reader. However, the transition between the final points is somewhat mechanical, and the referencing in the last paragraph is unclear (e.g., 'female for 53%'). Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point back to the subject would enhance the coherence of the response. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal structure of the final paragraph needs more refinement to ensure smooth progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'participation rates', and 'category'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'Australian of both gender male and female' and 'participate rate' instead of 'participation rate'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using nouns and adjectives correctly in context and expanding your range of reporting verbs beyond 'recorded' or 'had'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use comparative structures, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'expect in the 15 to 24 age category' (should be 'except') and 'female for 53%' (missing a verb). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and pluralisation, such as 'across different six age groups'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of the text.

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