Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart represents the parcentage of different age groups who did consistant physical activity in the year 2010 and also did comparison of male and female.
Overall, near around a half of all the age groups were engage with physical activity but females were more active compared with male.
The only age group which is 15 to 24, male were more active compare to other age groups with 52.8%. The age group of 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 had quite similarity in terms of engage with physical activities in both male and female but huge different shown between them who were 35 to 44 year old.
The highest figure of percentage were shown in female, who regularly connect with activities and these comes under the age group of 45 to 54 with 53.3% followed by age group of 55 to 64. There is only minor difference shown between male and female who are 65 and above year old.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the overall trend and specific age group comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the statement that 'near around a half of all the age groups were engage with physical activity' is a vague generalization that lacks precision. Furthermore, the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that there was a 'huge different' between males and females aged 35-44, which is not clearly supported by the data provided. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that comparisons are clearly linked to the specific figures shown in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow of ideas is often disjointed due to awkward phrasing and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical or missing, making the progression of information feel repetitive. For example, the use of 'The only age group which is...' and 'The highest figure of percentage were shown in...' creates a choppy reading experience. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise, which hinders the clarity of the report. There are several spelling errors, such as 'parcentage' and 'consistant', and awkward collocations like 'regularly connect with activities'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more academic terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'significant', and 'marginal', and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The highest figure... were shown'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'engage' instead of 'engaged'), and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The punctuation is generally acceptable, but the overall control of grammar is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that adjectives and nouns are used in their correct forms.
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