Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of different age groups among Australian men and women who did daily physical activity in 2010.

Overall, we can see that the female 45 to 54 age group did most physical activity. On the other hand, male age group between 35 to 44 are the least doing physical activity.

As we can see, for males and females from the 15 to 24 age group, males did more physical activity daily than females, and those percentages are 52.8% and 47.7%, respectively. After that, we can see an almost similar percentage of Australian males and females whose age group is 65 and over did regular exercise in 2010, and the percentages are 46.7% and 47.1%, respectively.

On the other hand, age group from 25 to 64, most of the females did regular physical activities than males, among them the highest age group of doing physical activity is 45 to 54 and almost 53.3% females did regular activity, while just 43.1% males did regular activities in 2010. Females from the age of 25 to 54, the percentage of doing physical activity increased.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart and made relevant comparisons between the age groups and genders. You provided specific data points to support your observations, which is excellent. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the overview is more comprehensive. While you mentioned the highest and lowest points, a more analytical summary would group the trends more effectively. For instance, noting that women generally participated more in physical activity across the middle age brackets would have strengthened the response. Overall, you have covered all parts of the task well, though some of the data presentation could be more concise to avoid repetition.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and an overview. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand', 'As we can see', and 'respectively' to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping the data more logically rather than jumping between age groups. For example, the final paragraph feels slightly disjointed as it attempts to summarize multiple trends at once. Improving the flow between sentences would help the reader follow your analysis more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. You use terms like 'illustrates', 'percentage', and 'regular physical activity' appropriately. However, there is some repetition of phrases such as 'did physical activity' and 'age group'. To reach a higher band, try to use more varied synonyms or paraphrasing, such as 'engaged in exercise', 'participated in physical activity', or 'fitness routines'. Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'least doing physical activity', which should be 'the least active group'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'male age group between 35 to 44 are the least doing physical activity' should be 'the male age group between 35 and 44 was the least active'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'most of the females did regular physical activities than males', which should be 'more females participated in regular physical activity than males'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the score.

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