Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart below illustrates the percentages that who did daily physical activity of Australian men and women in different ages groups.

The given bar chart shows the regular physical activity of Australian people. 52.8% men doing activity of daily lives activities in 15 to 24 group of ages. While these regular physical activities of men are decreased with it's huge ages groups but women are doing well activities at large ages groups.

First of all, I'm talking about men regular physical activity. Men doing well activities in 15 to 24 group of ages and these activities are decreased with the passage of time as shown in bar chart. So the bar chart shows the men don't doing well activities in old ages.

While on the hand in case of women the chart shows that women don't well in young ages. They are doing well in mid ages. As shown in bar chart 53.3% women doing well regular activities at the age's group of 45 to 54. And at the end age groups her daily activities again decreased as shown in bar chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. While it mentions some figures, the analysis is superficial and lacks precision. For example, the statement 'men don't doing well activities in old ages' is vague and does not accurately reflect the data provided in the chart. Furthermore, the response relies on informal language ('doing well') rather than reporting the data objectively. To improve, you should focus on identifying the highest and lowest points for each gender and describing the trends across age groups more systematically, rather than using conversational filler phrases.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused, such as 'First of all' and 'While on the hand', which are not appropriate for an academic report. The referencing is also unclear; for instance, the phrase 'these regular physical activities of men are decreased with it's huge ages groups' is confusing and lacks a clear connection to the previous sentence. The flow between ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two groups.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the phrase 'doing well' and 'activities', which does not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'huge ages groups' instead of 'older age groups' and 'mid ages' instead of 'middle age'. The lack of precise terminology to describe statistical data (e.g., 'proportion', 'percentage', 'trend', 'decline', 'peak') significantly limits your ability to convey information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('men doing well', 'women don't well'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures ('the percentages that who did'). The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct tense forms for reporting data.

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