Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

"The bar chart below illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who engage in daily physical activity.

Overall, the chart shows regular physical activity among Australians. 52.8% of men aged 15 to 24 reported doing daily physical activity. However, this percentage declines significantly with age for men. In contrast, women are less active in younger age groups but become more active in middle age.

Looking at men first, activity levels are highest in the 15-24 age group. They then decrease steadily over time. This indicates that older men are much less likely to exercise daily.

For women, the trend is different. Activity levels are low in younger age groups and peak in middle age. For example, 53.3% of women aged 45 to 54 engage in regular physical activity, which is the highest rate for women. After this age group, their activity levels decline again, as shown in the chart."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided relevant data points to support your summary. You clearly contrasted the downward trend for men with the middle-age peak for women. However, the response could be improved by including more comparative data. For instance, you mention that women are 'less active in younger age groups' but do not provide the specific figures to contrast with the men's 52.8%. Additionally, the prompt asks for 'regular physical activity,' but your introduction incorrectly specifies 'daily physical activity,' which is a slight misinterpretation of the data labels. Including more precise comparisons between the genders at specific age intervals would elevate this to a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for men and women. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However,' 'In contrast,' and 'For example' to link your sentences effectively. To improve, you could use a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect the two body paragraphs more fluidly, rather than relying on simple transitions like 'Looking at men first.' The paragraphing is appropriate, and the information is presented in a coherent manner throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'declines significantly,' 'steady,' and 'peak.' The language is generally accurate and conveys the intended meaning without difficulty. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive, particularly the use of 'activity levels' and 'age groups.' To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more varied synonyms and less common lexical items related to data description, such as 'fluctuate,' 'marginal,' or 'proportion,' to demonstrate a more sophisticated control of language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

Your grammar is generally sound, and the majority of your sentences are error-free. You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as '53.3% of women aged 45 to 54 engage in regular physical activity, which is the highest rate for women.' While your control is good, the range of complex structures is somewhat limited. To improve, try to incorporate more varied subordinate clauses or passive voice constructions to describe the data, which would demonstrate greater flexibility and precision in your grammatical range.

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