Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As the chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age gropus who did regural physical activity in 2010.Aa the given ages of men and women are start from 15 and there is no end it just written 65 and over.I am starting comparing this.So you can see in the chart thet from age 15 to age 23 the males did more regular activities then females.The regular avtivities of males are 52.8 as given in the chart and the regular activities lof women are 47.7.As it is clear from the chart that is a difference betwen the regular activities of men and women.As we go forward we clearly see that from age 25 to 34 the females did more activities then males.As it is clear from the chat that the activities of women are 48.9 and the activities of men are 42.2 it means that females do more activities then men in age 25 to 34

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by identifying some trends in the data, but it fails to provide a comprehensive overview. It focuses only on two age groups (15-23 and 25-34) and ignores the rest of the data, including the 65 and over category. The description is repetitive and lacks a clear summary of the main features or significant trends across the entire chart. To improve, you must report on all categories provided in the visual data and ensure you synthesize the information rather than simply listing individual data points. The lack of an overview paragraph significantly limits the score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks logical paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. The progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'As it is clear from the chart' and 'As we go forward'. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and often redundant manner. There is no clear structure (introduction, overview, body paragraphs), which makes the response difficult to follow. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, a clear overview of the main trends, and specific body paragraphs that group related data together.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'activities' and 'did' throughout the text. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'gropus', 'regural', 'thet', 'avtivities', and 'lof'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to use a wider variety of verbs (e.g., 'participated in', 'engaged in', 'undertook') and nouns (e.g., 'physical exercise', 'fitness routines') to describe the data, and ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response consists mostly of simple sentence structures with frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the given ages... are start from' and 'the regular activities... are 52.8'. You also struggle with comparative structures, using 'then' instead of 'than' consistently. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensure you use the correct comparative forms. Practicing the difference between 'then' (time) and 'than' (comparison) is essential for your writing.

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