Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph depicts that in 2010 the physical lifestyle of australia men and women was complete up and down for both man and women from 0 to 60 perctenage and 15 to 65 age group of people
Firstly, the age between 15 to 24 has the higest percentage of 52.8 for women and for men it is slightly lower 47.7 only but the next 10 years gap said women age of 25 to 34 shows decrease of physical excerise but 42 percent only and on the other hand boys plays a good role of increase of 48.9 percent of healthnes.
Secondly, Both men and women shows the excillent performance in the physical activities and give a strong competition to one another .Age from 45 to 65 the men and women shows different level and highest is touch by women in 54 age of 53 percent.
By the end of both, the physical activity of both end at same level 46 percent for men and women . it took denamic changes throught out decades and but finish at same level.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with clarity and accuracy. While it identifies some trends, the description of the data is often confusing, such as the phrase 'complete up and down for both man and women from 0 to 60 perctenage'. The overview is weak and fails to highlight the most significant trends clearly. Furthermore, some data points are misinterpreted or poorly explained, such as the reference to '54 age of 53 percent', which does not align clearly with standard chart interpretation. To improve, focus on identifying the most prominent features—such as the peak participation rates—and describing them with precise data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing and some linking words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'on the other hand'. However, the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear sentence structures. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups. Referencing is often imprecise, and the use of cohesive devices feels somewhat mechanical rather than natural. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several inaccuracies. Phrases like 'physical lifestyle', 'boys plays a good role', and 'denamic changes' are either unnatural or incorrect in this context. There is also a reliance on repetitive and simple language. Spelling errors, such as 'perctenage', 'excerise', 'healthnes', and 'throught', are frequent and detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained constant', and ensure accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Both men and women shows'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction ('the physical activity of both end at same level'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces and misused commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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