Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As the chart show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activities in 2010.Now i am starting the camparison between them.As it is given in the chart that the ages of men and women are from 15 to 65 and and on the other side the percentage is given from 0 to 60.As we can see in the chart that in age 15 to 24 males do more regular activities then women.The percentage of the male activities is 52.8 and on the other side the percentage of the female activities is 47.7.the males activity is higher than the females activity.as we go forward we can see that in the age 25 to 34 the female activities are higher than the male activities.The percentage of the females avtivity is 48.9 and on the other side the percentage of males activity is 42.2 which is the females.As you go forward you can clearly see that the percentage of women is higher than the percentage of men.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart but lacks a clear overview, which is essential for Task 1. The writing is overly descriptive, listing data points rather than synthesising the information to highlight trends or significant differences. For instance, the response focuses on individual age groups without providing a summary of the overall pattern of physical activity across the lifespan. To improve, you should group the data logically and provide a clear opening statement that summarises the main trend, such as the general decline in activity levels as age increases, rather than just describing the chart's axes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The progression of ideas is mechanical, relying heavily on repetitive phrases like 'As we can see in the chart' and 'As you go forward'. Cohesive devices are limited and often used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'on the other side' to introduce data points. To improve, you should organise your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'conversely', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' would improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'activities' and 'percentage', which limits the range of your writing. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'the males activity is higher than the females activity', where the possessive form is missing or misused. To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'participation rates', or 'figures', and vary your verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect punctuation, and issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'As the chart show'). Sentence structures are simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. There are also issues with informal phrasing, such as 'Now i am starting the camparison', which is inappropriate for an academic report. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct use of articles, and avoiding informal conversational language. Practice combining simple sentences into more complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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