Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar present the percentage of Australian men and women doing physical activity on regular basis at 2010, which shows different age group starting at 15 to 65 above.
In the graph female ratio is high compared to the mens ratio. In instant only the youngest men doing great compared to women otherwise women are doing much better than men.
Starting at the age of 15 mens are showing much interest in physical activity at the age of 24 after that it goes to down compare to women. At every age women are doing physical activity at least at 50 percentage but men on the other hand shows significantly downside.but the at age of 65 men and women are doing physical activity at the same 48%.
But the age of 25 to 60 women are giving much more concentration and doing regular physical activity which can be shown in the given graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall trend that women generally participate more in physical activity than men, and identifies the exception at age 65. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, it mentions '50 percentage' without specifying the age groups, and the description of the trends is somewhat vague. The summary is present, but the lack of specific data points for the intermediate age groups makes the overview less effective. To improve, ensure that key figures are accurately cited to support the comparisons made.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'at the age of' and 'doing physical activity'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs, where the comparison between genders lacks clear signposting. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'mens ratio' instead of 'men's participation rate' and 'goes to down' instead of 'declines'. The repetition of basic phrases like 'doing physical activity' limits the lexical variety. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'peak', and 'trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The bar present'), incorrect preposition usage ('at 2010'), and awkward sentence structures ('In instant only the youngest men doing great'). While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often marred by errors in tense and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops and capitalisation. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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