Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of men and women from different age groups in Australia who engaged in regular physical activities in 2010.

Overall, women had higher participation rates than men in almost all age groups, with the exception of those aged 15–24.

Firstly, among those aged 15–24, men had a higher participation rate than women, at 52.8% and approximately 50%, respectively. Conversely, in the 25-34 age category, females led males with a difference of around 6%. This trend continued in the 35-44 age group. The figure for women was 52.5%, compared with 39.5% for men.

In age groups like 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, women led men with a substantial margin. For the 45 to 54 cohort, 43.1% of men participated, compared with 53.3% of women. Similarly, in the 55 to 64 age group, women exceeded men by around 10 percentage points. Finally, among those aged 65 and over, the figures for men and women were 46.7% and 47.1%, respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response effectively addresses the task by identifying the main features and providing relevant comparisons. You have successfully highlighted the overall trend of female participation and contrasted it with the male-dominated 15–24 age group. The data is accurately reported, and the inclusion of specific percentages, such as '52.8%' and '53.3%', demonstrates a good grasp of the information. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide a more comprehensive overview in the introduction or summary paragraph, perhaps by noting the general range of participation across all groups, which would further strengthen the analytical aspect of your report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. You have used cohesive devices effectively, such as 'Firstly', 'Conversely', and 'Similarly', to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different age cohorts, which helps in maintaining a clear structure. The referencing is consistent, and the flow between sentences is smooth. To improve further, you could experiment with more varied cohesive links to avoid relying on standard transition words, which would make the writing feel more sophisticated and natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly and precisely. Terms such as 'proportion', 'engaged', 'cohort', and 'exceeded' are used accurately in the context of describing data. The use of 'percentage points' is a good example of precise terminology. While the vocabulary is appropriate and accurate, it is somewhat functional. To achieve a higher band, you could incorporate more varied synonyms for 'higher' or 'led' (e.g., 'outstripped', 'surpassed') and use more sophisticated collocations to describe the trends in the bar chart.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response demonstrates a good control of grammatical structures. You have successfully used a mix of simple and complex sentences, such as 'The bar chart illustrates the proportion of men and women... who engaged in regular physical activities'. Punctuation is generally accurate, and there are no significant errors that impede communication. The use of comparative structures is consistent and error-free. To move into the higher bands, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms, such as passive voice constructions or participle clauses, to demonstrate greater flexibility in your grammatical range.

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