Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This chart describes the regular activity of men and women of Australia in 2010. It shows that people of different age have different activity.

Firstly, in between fifteen to twenty-four men rise a high percentage then women. But in comparison to twenty-five to thirty-four and thirty-five to forty-four women gives greater percentage of physical activity, and in thirty-five to forty-four women leads a high percentage and men percentage falls down. Age group of forty-five to fifty-four, women bar graph remain same but men chart goes a little upward. People of age fifty-five to sixty-four, as same to their younger women chart remain same and men graph show a little rise in their activity. And at the last older age group as above sixty-five years, both genders charts keep remain same and show same percentage of activity.

In the conclusion, this bar chart flactuate upward and downward according to age difference of two opposite genders.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response provides a basic summary of the data, but it lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band. While you identify some trends, the descriptions are often vague (e.g., 'rise a high percentage') and lack specific data points from the chart to support your claims. You attempt to compare genders, which is good, but the lack of precise figures makes the report less informative. To improve, ensure you include specific percentages for key age groups and provide a clearer overview of the most significant trends rather than listing every age group sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into three short paragraphs, which is a logical structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'Firstly' and 'In the conclusion' are used, but the internal flow between sentences is often disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'as same to their younger women chart', which makes the comparison difficult to follow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and basic. You rely heavily on simple terms like 'high', 'rise', and 'same'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'flactuate' (spelling error) and 'women leads a high percentage' (incorrect collocation). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'proportion', 'significant', or 'marginal'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you describe the trends more accurately and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('women leads', 'men graph show') and awkward phrasing ('men rise a high percentage then women'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and some sentences are grammatically incomplete or confusing. Focusing on basic sentence construction—specifically ensuring subjects and verbs agree and using correct comparative structures—will help you achieve more accuracy in your writing.

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