Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in the various age bands who regularly did physical activity in 2010.

The highest percentage of men who did regular physical activity is in the age group of 15 to 24. Whereas the highest percentage of women who did regular exercise belongs to the age group of 45 to 54. Women were found to be more physically active in the later years of unlike men who are most active in their later teenage rather.

In 2010, 52.8% of men aged between 15 and 24 did regular physical activity which was the highest percentage among men in all age bands. As they got older, physical activity decreased, dropped to 42.2% in the 25 to 34 age group, and further declined to 39.5% in 35 to 44 age group which was the lowest percentage recorded. However the proportion increased later to 43.1% among men aged between 45 and 54, and increased further to 45.1% in 55 to 64 age category. Lastly 46.7% of men aged 65 and above did physical activity daily.

In case of women, 47.7% of women aged between 15 and 24 did regular activity, which was comparatively lesser than the percentage of men. 48.9% of women aged between 25 to 34, and 52.5% of them aged between 35 to 44 did physical exercise daily. The highest percentage, 53.3% was recorded in the age group of 45 to 54. Then the percentage dropped to 53% and 47.1% in the age groups of 55 to 64 and 65 or above respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all age groups and made relevant comparisons between men and women. However, the overview in the second paragraph is slightly confusingly phrased, particularly the sentence 'Women were found to be more physically active in the later years of unlike men who are most active in their later teenage rather.' This lacks clarity and precision. To improve, ensure your summary highlights the most significant trends—such as the contrasting patterns between genders—more clearly and concisely. Overall, you have addressed the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. You use cohesive devices such as 'In 2010', 'As they got older', and 'In case of women' to guide the reader through the data. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'In case of women' (better: 'In contrast, for women') and the concluding sentence of the second paragraph, which disrupts the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the data for men and women, which aids readability. Further improvement could be made by using a wider variety of linking phrases to connect ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'proportion', 'category', and 'recorded'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'did regular physical activity' (which is repeated frequently) and 'comparatively lesser than'. To reach a higher band, try to vary your verbs and adjectives to avoid repetition and use more precise collocations. For example, instead of repeating 'did physical activity', you could use 'engaged in physical exercise' or 'participated in regular activity'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'in the age group of 15 to 24' (often better as 'in the 15–24 age group') and the awkward phrasing in the second paragraph. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and preposition errors, such as 'in 35 to 44 age group' (missing 'the'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage and sentence structure refinement will help improve your accuracy.

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