Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women in six different age groups while doing regular fitness exercise in 2010.

Overall, the female is more active then male in all age groups except the youngest group and those aged 65 and over. the highest proportion was recorded among 45-54 ages old, while the figure for male was highest among 15-24 aged group.

among men aged 15-24, 52.8% participated at regular fitness activity, compared with 47.7% of women. However, male participation was declined significantly up to 42.2% at 25-34 aged group. and then reached to its lowest point 39.5% in the 35-44 aged group.

after this, the figure increased gradually, reaching 43.1% among 45-54 years old and 45.1% for those at 55-64 aged group, Among men aged 65 and over. participation rose further 46.7%.

In contrast, female participation increased from 47.7% at 15-24 youngsters to 48.9% in the 25-34 years old. it peaked at 52.5%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview and selects key features, such as the trends for men and women across age groups. However, the report is incomplete; the description of the data stops abruptly after mentioning the 25-34 age group for women, failing to cover the remaining categories (35-44, 45-54, 55-64, and 65+). While the main features are identified, the failure to report on the entire dataset significantly impacts the task completion. To improve, ensure all categories mentioned in the prompt are addressed in the body paragraphs to provide a comprehensive summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a logical attempt to sequence the information. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'In contrast' are used to link ideas. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Additionally, some referencing is slightly awkward, such as 'the female' and 'the male', which should be pluralized to 'females' and 'males' or 'women' and 'men' to maintain consistency. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel unfinished.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'proportion', 'participated', and 'declined' used correctly. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'while doing regular fitness exercise' (should be 'when participating in regular physical activity') and '15-24 youngsters' (which is not standard academic terminology). There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and nouns. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'the female is more active then male' (should be 'females are more active than males'), '45-54 ages old' (should be 'the 45-54 age group'), and 'male participation was declined' (should be 'male participation declined'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences starting with lowercase letters after periods. These errors are frequent, though they do not completely impede communication.

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