Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of Australian male and female in different age group who did regular physical activity in the year in 2010.

Ovaral, the graph show man in physical activity highest was teenage age group while women was lowest was that age group therefore female were more percentage was all group age than male.

First of all. The boys were more percentage in physical exercige in age group 15 to 24 at 52.8%. while lowest be followed by the 48.9% at age group 25 to 34. While lowest proportion at age group around 35 to 44 years at nearly by 39.5%. age group 45 to 65 over men also active more approximately at 43.1% in 45 to 54 age, 45.1 in 55 to 64 age & 65 fover also 46.7%.

In the same period women were good proportion was physical activities, women were highest in age group 45 to 54 at 53.3% while lowest in age group 65 to 44 at around 30.5%.15 to 24 age group women had 47.7 % do regular exercises.The age group 35 to 44,45 to 54 and 55 to 64 was similarly proportion in regular physical exercise around 52.5%, 53.3%, 53% respectively. 47.1% womens ware do physical exercise age above 65.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, such as the age groups and gender comparisons. However, the overview is confusing and contains inaccurate claims, such as stating that women were higher in all age groups, which contradicts the data for the 15-24 and 35-44 age brackets. The reporting of figures is sometimes inconsistent or difficult to follow, particularly in the description of the 35-44 and 45-54 age groups. While the task is addressed, the lack of clarity in the overview and the misinterpretation of some data points limit the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all' and 'In the same period', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track which age group or gender is being discussed. The progression of ideas is hindered by the lack of clear sentence structure, which makes the overall argument difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'highest', 'lowest', and 'proportion'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'Ovaral' (Overall), 'exercige' (exercise), and 'mans' (men). Word choice is often imprecise, such as 'good proportion was physical activities' instead of 'a high proportion participated in physical activities'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the graph show man'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'While lowest proportion at age group around 35 to 44 years at nearly by 39.5%.' The control over complex structures is weak, and the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of decimals and commas.

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