Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart indicates the percentage for physical activities of men and women in Australia. This chart specifically represents the percentage of regular physical activities in 2010.
The bar chart is consists of age group from 15 years to 65 and over. It is showing individual percentage for men and women that how they are contributing in their physical activities.
Initially, young people are involved more in physical activities about 52% male and 47% female.The age group 25 to 34 is also taking part in physical activities, but the people of 35 to 44 are showing great interest in physical activities specially female group.
Moreover, female group continued their progress from 44 years to 64 years constant. But men did not show any seriousness about physical activities after the age of 25. Finally, at the age of 60 Australian men and women are taking equal part in their physical activities.
Through out the whole age group, people showed average interest in the physical activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify some trends, such as the participation rates of young people, the description of the data is inconsistent. For instance, you mention '44 years to 64 years' as a constant period, but the data shows fluctuations. Furthermore, the claim that men 'did not show any seriousness' after 25 is an informal and subjective interpretation rather than an objective report of the data. To improve, focus on providing more precise data points and comparing the genders more systematically across all age brackets rather than making generalisations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'Initially', 'Moreover', and 'Finally', which helps structure the response. However, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'the age group 25 to 34 is also taking part in physical activities, but the people of 35 to 44 are showing great interest'. It is not always clear what you are comparing or why you are highlighting specific groups. Improving the use of linking phrases to connect comparisons would enhance the overall progression of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'physical activities', which appears multiple times. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'showing great interest' or 'continued their progress', which do not accurately describe statistical data. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of synonyms and more precise academic vocabulary related to data reporting, such as 'participation rates', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are several grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'The bar chart is consists of' is grammatically incorrect, as is 'how they are contributing in their physical activities'. You also have issues with article usage and preposition choice, such as 'at the age of 60' (when referring to a group) and 'Through out the whole age group'. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, the frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit your score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring your sentences are grammatically complete.
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