Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given glance illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Firstly, shows the highest percentage of Austrailan men's and women's doing regular physical activity done by men's and its 52.8%. and for women's they did 47.7%. however, in age group 25 to 34 slightly decreased and its 42.2 by men's and by women's increased. it is shows 48.9. after 45 to 54 age group. its shows 45.1 by men's and 53.3 by women's however, in 55 to 64 age group in slighlty increased and its 45.1 and women's percentage its reached 53%.
secondly, over the 65 age group its show remained stable. its show 46.7 by men's and 47.1 by women's.
overall, in 15 to 16 age group in men's doing more physical activity and mid twenties w omen's did more physical activitiy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to report on the data, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The description of the data is often confusing, with inaccurate reporting of figures and age groups (e.g., '15 to 16 age group' is not present in the chart). You have identified some comparisons, but the lack of clarity and the failure to reach the required length prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise overview and accurately transcribe data points without grammatical interference.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'Firstly' and 'secondly' which do not effectively link the data points. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between men and women across the age groups. The sentences are disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between the different age categories hinders the overall flow of the report. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic structures like 'its shows' and 'by men's', which are grammatically incorrect and lexically simplistic. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing statistical data. Words like 'glance' are used inappropriately in this context. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing trends and comparisons, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', 'a significant proportion', or 'the majority'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will help you convey information more precisely and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect use of possessives (e.g., 'men's' instead of 'men'), and sentence fragments. The structure of your sentences is often awkward, making the data difficult to interpret. For example, 'it is shows 48.9' is grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, specifically subject-verb-object patterns, and avoid over-complicating sentences until you have achieved greater accuracy. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms is essential for improvement.
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