Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart given shows a total percentage of Australians divided in different groups who have done regular physical activity.The study was carried out in 2010.In the given bar chart,Australians have been divided based on gender and age ranging from 15 to above 65.
From the chart given, we can conclude few observations.Firstly, highest percentage of Australian men who do regular physical activity are from age range 15-24 years with a record of 52.8%.Maximum percentage of women who do regular physical activity are from 45-54 years with 53.3%.Secondly, lowest percentage of performing physical activity daily is from 35-44 age among men of 39.5% and among women at the of 65 and above of 47.1%.Thirdly, we can observe from the chart that the percentage of Australian men is declining in the bar given for from 15-24 to 35 to 44.Likewise for women, it has been decreased from 45-54 to 65 and above.
Lastly, the bar chart shows continuous progress for men from 45-54 to 65 and above. Similarly, for women the percentage increases from 15-24 age to 35-44.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, including the highest and lowest points for both genders. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. While you have identified specific data points, the comparison between genders could be more integrated. For instance, instead of listing observations in a 'firstly, secondly, thirdly' structure, grouping the data by trends (e.g., age groups where participation is highest vs. lowest) would provide a more cohesive summary. The data is generally accurate, but the lack of a distinct overview paragraph prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly'. The progression of ideas is logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel disjointed. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more naturally rather than relying on a list-like structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information about percentages and age groups. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are some awkward phrasings, such as 'at the of 65 and above' and 'in the bar given for from 15-24'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained consistent'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'a total percentage of Australians divided in different groups' (should be 'into') and 'it has been decreased' (passive voice is unnecessary here). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods in the first paragraph. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will improve your accuracy.
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