Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of different age groups of Australians involved in a physical activity regularly in the year 2010 on gender basis.

Overall , women in all age groups can be seen actively participating in physical activities except 15-24 age group. Almost equal number of men and women aged 65 and over took part in these activities regularly.

52.8% boys aged between 15 to 24, which is the highest among all males in all age groups actively took part in physical activities, whereas 47.7% of girls in this age group liked doing a physical activity. A vast number of females in the age 35 to 44 preferred doing physical activities that is recorded as 52.5% and only 39.5% male participation can be seen , which is the lowest in all age groups.

53.3% women of the age 45-54 took part in these activities and is the highest percentage recorded in all age groups.Preference among individuals doing physical activity was almost same for both the genders aged 65 and over which is 46.7% in males and 47.1% in females

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers the main features of the chart well, identifying key trends and making relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. You successfully highlighted the highest and lowest participation rates. However, the report could be improved by providing a more comprehensive overview of the data. For instance, while you mention the 15-24 and 65+ groups, you could have more clearly contrasted the general trend of female participation being higher in middle age versus male participation peaking in the youngest bracket. The inclusion of specific data points is accurate and supports your summary effectively, meeting the requirements for a Band 7.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information by age categories. The progression of ideas is generally smooth. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'whereas' and 'however', to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is slightly uneven, and some transitions between sentences feel a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus and that referencing (e.g., 'these activities') is always precise to avoid any ambiguity. Overall, the structure is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'participating', 'recorded', and 'preference'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'on gender basis' (should be 'by gender') and 'boys' (when referring to the 15-24 age group, 'males' is more appropriate in an academic context). While you attempt to use some less common vocabulary, the phrasing is occasionally slightly unnatural. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and adverbs would help elevate the precision of your descriptions and move you into a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('in the age 35 to 44') and awkward phrasing ('is the highest percentage recorded in all age groups' lacks a clear subject). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are some spacing issues around commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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