Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart shows the percentage of different men and women having different age groups currently working in Australia .
In the beginning, we can see that women are more active than men in all age groups except the men having age between 15 to 24 with 52.8% as compared to women who's % is 47.7 . The main reason for this increase is that men are highly active when they are young .
In the age of 25 to 34 the women doing regular physical activities having number 48.8% as compared to men who's numbers decreased to 42.2%.
The biggest difference seen among two age 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 the percentage of men fell in 39.5 and 43.1 .Whereas women remain highly active with the percentage of 52.5 and 53.3 .
However, 45.1% of men and 53% of women aged with 55 to 64 doing regular physical activities . Finally the figure of men and women at the age of 65 and over are nearly close to 46.7 and 47.1 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart and makes relevant comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive and lacks a clear overview of the general trends. For instance, stating 'the main reason for this increase is that men are highly active when they are young' is an attempt at interpretation, which is not required for this task and is not supported by the data provided. The report would be stronger if it focused more on identifying the overall patterns, such as the general decline in activity for men compared to the relative stability for women across age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing. While some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Whereas' are used, the transition between sentences is sometimes mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'the percentage of men fell in 39.5 and 43.1', where the relationship between the age groups and the figures is confusingly expressed. Improved paragraphing and more precise linking of data points would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There is repetitive use of basic phrases like 'percentage of' and 'doing regular physical activities'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'aged with 55 to 64' and 'the figure of men and women... are nearly close to'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied reporting verbs and nouns, and ensure collocations are accurate, such as using 'participation rates' instead of just 'percentage'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'women who's % is 47.7' (incorrect use of possessive 'who's' instead of 'whose' or 'the percentage of whom is'), 'the women doing regular physical activities having number 48.8%' (missing verb 'had' or 'recorded'), and 'the age of 65 and over are nearly close to'. These errors in subject-verb agreement and sentence construction are noticeable throughout the text.
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