Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The data presents number of individuals in Australia that done their daily activities in 2010.

Overall, the bar chart gives information about five stages of ages of the those people who can do their works in Australia. largest list is of 45 to 54 years old people and lowest is 65 years old.

The change in 2010 shows the five steps of people age and the first is 15 to 24 years old and in which women are 47% and men are 52%. The second is the age from 25 to 34 and this shows males 42% and female are 49%. The third age is 35 to 44 years old and in which men are 39.5% and women are 52.5%.

The fourth age is from 45 to 54 and in which male are 435 and female are 53%. The fifth age list is 55 to 64 and that contain the 45% male and 53% female. The last is 65 and over years old and in the amount of men and women are remain same and it is about 47% who do their physical workout.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by summarizing the provided bar chart. However, the analysis is superficial and contains significant inaccuracies. For instance, you state the 'largest list is of 45 to 54 years old' and the 'lowest is 65 years old', which is not clearly supported by the data provided. Furthermore, there is a major data error where you report '435' instead of 43% for the 45-54 age group. While you cover all age groups, the lack of accurate data reporting and the failure to provide a meaningful comparison between genders or trends across age groups limits the effectiveness of the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on phrases like 'The first is...', 'The second is...', and 'The third age is...', which makes the writing feel like a list rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often basic or misused, such as the transition 'The change in 2010 shows...', which does not accurately describe the data. Improving the use of linking words to show relationships between the age groups would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'list', 'age', and 'amount'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'done their daily activities' (should be 'participated in regular physical activity') and 'five stages of ages' (should be 'age groups'). The error '435' is a clear lexical/numerical slip that impacts clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'The data presents number of individuals' (missing article), 'that done their daily activities' (incorrect verb tense), and 'in which male are 435' (subject-verb agreement and typo). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often faulty, such as 'The fifth age list is 55 to 64 and that contain the 45% male and 53% female.' You need to focus on basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to improve accuracy.

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