Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

This visual representation shows that from ages 15 to 24 men were predominantly engaged in regular physical activity which was 52.8% than women which were 47.7% but this trend changes drastically from ages 25 to 64.

From ages 25 to 34, the percenatge of women involved in regular physical activity was 48.9% as compared to 42.2% of men. From ages 35 to 44, the difference between men and women doing regular physical activity increased dramatically. 52.5 % of women were involved in regular physical activity in comparison to 39.5 % of men.

The difference between the percentage of men and women invovled in regular physical acitvity from ages 35 to 54 is relatively large. From ages 45 to 54, 53.3 % of women were involved in regular physical activity in relation to 43.1% of men.

Even, between ages 5

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview of the data and selects relevant features to compare. However, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly at 'Even, between ages 5'. Because the final age group (65+) is entirely omitted, the task is not fully addressed. While the initial reporting of data is accurate, the failure to complete the summary prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, ensure all data categories are covered and the conclusion is fully articulated before the end of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized by age group, which makes the information easy to follow. Cohesive devices such as 'From ages 25 to 34' and 'in comparison to' are used effectively to link ideas. However, the abrupt ending disrupts the overall coherence of the text. Paragraphing is present, but the incomplete nature of the final sentence suggests a lack of planning or time management. To improve, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that the response reaches a natural conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with clear and accurate use of terms like 'predominantly engaged', 'visual representation', and 'drastically'. There are some minor spelling errors, such as 'percenatge' and 'invovled', and a repetition of the phrase 'regular physical activity'. While the range is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. Using more varied synonyms for 'difference' or 'percentage' would enhance the lexical quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'which was 52.8% than women which were 47.7%', which is awkward phrasing. Additionally, the sentence 'Even, between ages 5' is a fragment due to the incomplete nature of the response. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the overall control of complex structures is inconsistent. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and avoiding fragmented sentences will help improve the accuracy of your writing.

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