Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph depicts the gender percentage of various age fellows of Australia who continued the habit of exercising on daily bases during the year of 2010.

Overall, the given data demonstrates that females lead in each age group, and they are more conscious about the fitness and health. Conversely, the males of age group 15 to 24 are accelerating the females. The equal proportion is only can be seen in age group of 65 and over.

First of all, in the age group of 15 to 24, the men are leading to the women with percentages of 52.8 and 47.7 respectively. The females are contributed higher with 48.9% as compared to males who comprised 42.2% in age group under 25 to 34. After that, the women have significant rise with 52.5% letting men behind with 39.5% in the age group of 35 to 44.

Furthermore, the age group with 45 to 54 has also higher proportion of females that contributed 53.3 percent as compared to the males. Similarly, the females are leading in age group of 55 to 64 with 53% and males held at 45.1%. The last age group of 65 and over has equal proportion of both genders.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all age groups and makes relevant comparisons between genders. The overview identifies the main trend (females generally leading) and notes the exception in the 15-24 age group. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, the text states that the 15-24 age group shows men leading, but the data provided in the text contradicts the visual trends often associated with such charts, and the phrasing 'accelerating the females' is unclear. The summary is generally effective, but the precision of the data reporting could be improved to better reflect the chart's information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Conversely', 'First of all', and 'Furthermore' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'After that, the women have significant rise'. Paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother to achieve a higher band. The referencing of age groups is consistent, which helps maintain clarity throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors. Phrases like 'age fellows', 'on daily bases', and 'accelerating the females' are non-standard and impede the precision of the report. While the student attempts to use specific terminology related to data description, the lack of control over these items limits the score. A wider range of precise vocabulary related to trends and comparisons would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The females are contributed higher') and awkward phrasing ('The equal proportion is only can be seen'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. To improve, the student should focus on passive voice construction and correct preposition usage.

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