Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart depicts the information about the different age groupes boy and girl, who were more activated in regular exercise in Australia in year 2010. The given information into percentage.
Overall, it can be derived that the higest figure shown the female who did regular physical activities in all ages exception for 15 to 24 ages while, the majority of male joining gym in their early age afterward this ratio was declined by passing age.
To initiat with, the largest proportion of men did physical exercise at 52.8 and women did it merly 47.7 at 15 to 24 age. Intrestingly, we can clearly see a negeligible difference between both gender at above 65 age.
Furthermore, the increasing trend follow in ladies who everyday did physical activity in age from 25 to 64, the ratio start with 48.9% and it was reach to a peak at 53%. Whereas, in 25 to 34, 42.2 men did physical and mentaly activity which was declined by 3% in next 10 years. Afterward, men attend gym for exercise by 43.1% and 45.1% in age 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the gender differences and age-related trends. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the statement that the 'highest figure shown the female' is inaccurate for the 15-24 age group, which you correctly identify later but fail to reconcile. The data reporting is occasionally imprecise, such as referring to '42.2 men' without specifying that this represents a percentage. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to their respective categories and that the overview provides a more accurate summary of the overall trends without contradictory statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'To initiat with', and 'Furthermore'. However, some of these are used incorrectly or are non-standard (e.g., 'To initiat with'). The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the logical flow feel mechanical rather than natural. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing specific age groups and percentages, which makes it difficult for the reader to track the comparisons between men and women effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and includes several inaccuracies. Words like 'groupes', 'activated', 'merly', and 'negeligible' are misspelled or misused. The phrase 'mentaly activity' is unclear in this context, and 'joining gym' is not the most natural collocation for describing physical activity participation. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the frequent errors in word choice and spelling occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on correct collocations would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the higest figure shown the female'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the ratio start with'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence construction is often awkward, such as 'the increasing trend follow in ladies who everyday did physical activity'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text prevents it from reaching a higher band level.
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