Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who are doing exercise in 2010.

Overall, female dominated men from doing physical activity in all age groups except from 15 to 24 ages when the men are slightly higher than women. Afterwards ages 65 and over both men and women became almost the same percentages.

In detail, Australian men who are more active at first have the higher start of percentages ages between 15-24 52.8% than women with 47.7%. Meanwhile, ages 25 to 34 the women are becoming more active in this ages who have 48.9% than men who became less active down to 42.2%, then ages 35 to 44 still women have higher percentage than men who increase more to 52.5 than men decline more to 39.5.

Additionally, men became more active by the ages of 45-54 the same ages 55 to 64 with the percentages of nearly the same around 43.1 to 45.1%. at the same time the women still continue to be more active in physical exercise increase even more to 53.3 to 53 both by the same age group.

Subsequently, age group 65 and over both genders have almost the same percentage 46.7 to 47.1.

In Summary, from the start of age group men are more active physically than women but later on as age goes by women do more exercises than men until ages 65 and over. while men at first are doing exercises but as they become old their passion to do exercises declines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task and identifies the main trends. You successfully highlight the contrast between the 15-24 age group and the subsequent age groups. However, the reporting of data is occasionally confusing, such as when you state 'men became more active by the ages of 45-54 the same ages 55 to 64 with the percentages of nearly the same around 43.1 to 45.1%'. This phrasing makes it difficult to distinguish the specific data points for each gender. To improve, ensure that comparisons are clearly linked to the specific figures provided in the chart to avoid ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices like 'In detail', 'Additionally', and 'Subsequently'. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is a bit abrupt. While you use linking words, they are sometimes used mechanically. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next will help you achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'physical activity', and 'genders'. However, there are several instances of word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'female dominated men' (should be 'females outnumbered males') and 'passion to do exercises' (which is not the most natural way to describe participation rates). Some phrasing is repetitive, and the vocabulary lacks the precision required for a higher band. Focusing on more academic collocations and precise reporting verbs will strengthen your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently struggle with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'except from 15 to 24 ages' and 'men are slightly higher than women'. Additionally, there are issues with tense consistency and sentence fragments. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity of your report. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical errors and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed correctly.

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