Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
At the age of 15-24 52.8% of men preferred physical activity whereas 47.7% of females does physical activity . At the age of 25-34 42.2% of males perform physical activity whereas 48.9% of females perform regular physical activity. On the other hand, at the age of 35-44 39.5% of males loves physical activity meanwhile 52.5% of women prefer physical activity. The next age group is 45-54 43.1% of males prefer regular physical activity whereas 53.3% of females did physical activity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Because the response is only 103 words, the analysis is incomplete. You have failed to include the remaining age groups (55-64 and 65+) and have not provided an overview of the main trends, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. To improve, you must ensure you cover all data points provided in the chart and include a clear summary paragraph that highlights the most significant trends or differences between the genders across the age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear structure. It consists of a single, repetitive paragraph that lists data points without any logical grouping or synthesis. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the sentences, making the writing feel like a mechanical list of figures rather than a coherent summary. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs and use linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'meanwhile') to show the relationship between the data points for men and women.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the phrase 'physical activity' and 'prefer', which makes the writing monotonous. There is also a lack of variety in how you describe the data. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of synonyms and more precise reporting verbs or nouns (e.g., 'participation rates', 'engaged in', 'showed a preference for'). Additionally, ensure proper capitalization for 'Australian' and 'females'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., '47.7% of females does' should be 'do') and tense consistency (switching between 'preferred', 'does', 'loves', and 'did'). The sentence structures are very simple and repetitive, lacking the complex grammatical forms required for higher bands. To improve, focus on maintaining consistent verb tenses when describing data from a specific year and work on varying your sentence structures by using subordinate clauses.
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