Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian male and female in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the age group between 45 to 54 has majority rather than others a little bit differences and the age group 35 to 44 were the second in the graph.

After analysing the chart, it can be seen that the group between 45 to 54 has rose significantly with 53.3% &43.1% respectively.The older age group between 55 to 64 were the second highest with 53% & 45%.While the younger groups 25 to 44 were third in the chart with ratio of 42 to 52%.

However, the group 15 to 24 thats very close to older groups it means that early young men and female is very serious about our health to doing physical activities in Australia.Consequently, now days physical activities is very important to our health.

In conclusion, the all age group is very sincere to our health every group have majority a little bit changes respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The main features are not clearly identified, and the data reporting is confusing. For instance, the statement that the 45-54 age group has the 'majority' is vague and does not accurately reflect the percentages provided in the chart. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal commentary about health habits in the final paragraph is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which should remain objective and focused solely on the data presented. The comparisons are often unclear or mathematically inaccurate based on the provided figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or misused (e.g., 'Consequently, now days...'). The referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'the all age group is very sincere to our health' is confusing and does not link back to the data effectively. While there is an attempt at an introduction and conclusion, the progression of ideas is not smooth, making it difficult for the reader to follow the analysis of the chart.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'has rose significantly' (should be 'has risen') and 'ratio of 42 to 52%' demonstrate a lack of precision in describing statistical data. There is also a tendency to use informal or inappropriate language, such as 'very serious about our health' and 'very sincere to our health', which are not suitable for an academic report. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary clarity or sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the group... has rose'), incorrect pluralisation (e.g., 'the all age group'), and awkward sentence structures. The use of punctuation, such as the ampersand (&) and the lack of spaces after periods, is unprofessional. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The majority of sentences contain errors, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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