Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, female had doing the highest physical activity during the age between 45 to 54 while men had the lowest exercise during the age gap between 35 to 44. 65 and over had followed the similar patterns.

There are six different age groups, in which 45 to 54 age the women accounted for highest proportion in 53.3% and male had lower percentage in 43.1% followed by the age group 15 to 24 while men had highest proportion as compared to women from 52.8% to 47.7%. In 35 to 44 age group the biggest proportion of female had 52.5% than male 39.5%.

Regarding the age group of 55 to 64 the largest share had female in 53% and male had lowest percentage in 45.1%. In 25 to 34 age group of female accounted for 48.9% and male had 42.2%. However, men and women had regular physical activity in the age group 65 and over had followed the similar pattern around at 47.1% female and 46.7% in male. Consequently, the physical activity of female had gradually increased over the period as compared to men they gradually fall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the age groups with the highest and lowest participation rates. However, the summary is slightly hindered by inaccurate data reporting; for instance, you state that women had the highest activity in the 45-54 age group at 53.3%, but the data shows this is actually the 55-64 group. Additionally, the concluding sentence claims a 'gradual increase' and 'gradual fall' over time, which is an incorrect interpretation of a static bar chart representing a single year (2010). To improve, ensure your data extraction is precise and avoid describing trends over time when the data is cross-sectional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear overall progression. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'Regarding', and 'However', to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions are awkward, such as '65 and over had followed the similar patterns' which lacks a clear subject. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing male and female percentages across groups. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each sentence clearly relates to the previous one to improve the logical flow of your comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'age groups'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'female had doing' (should be 'females had the highest'), 'age gap' (used incorrectly for age group), and 'male had lowest percentage' (should be 'men had the lowest'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on using nouns and adjectives correctly when describing statistics and avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('female had doing', 'men and women had regular physical activity... had followed') and article usage ('the age group 65 and over'). Some sentences are poorly constructed, making them difficult to parse, such as 'the biggest proportion of female had 52.5% than male 39.5%'. While these errors do not completely obscure meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing data.

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