Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This bar chart below shows total number of men and women who was involve in physical activities in 2010 in Australia.

The lighter black in the bar chart shows percentage of Men while the darker black in the bar chart shows percentage of Women.

Men in the age range of 15 to 24 years has 52.8 of physical activities while women 47.7 percentage. Men between age of 25 to 34 years has 42.2 percent while Women has 48.9.

Men between age of 35 to 44 years has 39.5 percent while women has 52.5 percent.

Men between age of 45 to 54 years has 43.1 percent while Women has 53.3.

Men between the age of 55 to 64 years has 45.1 percentage while women in the same age has 53 percent.

Men between the age of 65 and above has 46.7 percent while Women in the same age has 47.1 percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all age groups and provides data for both genders. However, it fails to provide a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The response is essentially a list of data points rather than a report that selects and highlights key features or makes meaningful comparisons. For instance, it does not note that women generally had higher participation rates in most age groups, nor does it identify the peak age groups for either gender. To improve, you should group information logically and identify significant trends or contrasts rather than simply transcribing the figures for every category.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. It is presented as a single block of text, which is not appropriate for a report. While there is some attempt at logical progression by age group, the lack of cohesive devices makes the writing feel mechanical and repetitive. Each sentence follows the same rigid structure ('Men... has... while women...'), which hinders the flow of the text. To improve, you should use paragraph breaks to separate the introduction from the body paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'has' or 'percentage' to describe the data, which makes the writing monotonous. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or comparisons (e.g., 'surpassed', 'remained stable', 'a significant proportion'). Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'lighter black' and 'darker black' to describe the bars, which is not standard terminology. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe statistical data and avoid repeating the same sentence structure throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Subject-verb agreement is a major issue, such as 'Men... has' (should be 'have') and 'women... was involve' (should be 'were involved'). Additionally, there are issues with articles and prepositions, such as 'in the age range of' and 'between age of'. The sentence structures are very simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and try to vary your sentence structure by using complex sentences with subordinate clauses to describe the data more effectively.

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