Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The provided bar chart compares the proportion of Australian male and female in different age groups doing regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, most Australian women were engaged in regular physical activity compared to men. However, 15 to 24 age group was the only category, where men seems to be doing physical activity more than women.

In the 15 to 24 age group, 52.8% of the male accounted for regular physical activity, whereas only 47.7% of the female did physical activity. The figure reduced for the men of 25 to 34 year old to 42.2%, while it increased for the female to about 49%. Additionally, 52.5% of the female of 35 to 44 age group do physical activity and for male the portion reduced more to 39.5%.

45 to 54 age group has the largest number of female doing exercise at 53.3%, followed by males at 43.1%. The proportion for male increased to 45.1% in the 55 to 64 age group category, whereas the percentage was the second highest for female at 53%. Finally, men over 65 years old engage more in daily physical activities with 46.7%, the highest figure for male. On the other hand, the proportion decreases for female of this age group to 47.1% while still representing a higher number than men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response effectively addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart. You have successfully identified the key trend—that women generally participated in more physical activity than men—and highlighted the exception in the 15-24 age group. The data is well-selected, and you have made relevant comparisons across the age categories. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with complete accuracy; for instance, you mentioned that men over 65 engage in 'daily' physical activities, but the chart only specifies 'regular' physical activity. Overall, the report is clear and covers all requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that follow a chronological age progression. The use of cohesive devices such as 'whereas,' 'additionally,' and 'on the other hand' helps to guide the reader through the comparisons. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different age groups. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions between sentences could be more sophisticated to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. Overall, the information is presented in a coherent manner that is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, including terms like 'proportion,' 'accounted for,' and 'engage in.' There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, though some phrasing is slightly repetitive. You occasionally struggle with word choice, such as 'the figure reduced for the men,' where 'decreased' or 'fell' would be more natural. Additionally, there are minor errors in collocation, such as 'the portion reduced more,' which slightly impacts the precision of the report. Expanding your repertoire of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'Australian male and female' (should be 'males and females'), '15 to 24 age group was the only category, where men seems' (should be 'men seemed'), and 'the female of 35 to 44 age group' (should be 'females in the 35-44 age group'). These errors occur frequently but do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of plural nouns when referring to demographic groups.

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