Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women of different age groups who did their regular physical activity in the year 2010.

Overall, female had relatively higher percentage in comparison to male while the young male had higher percentage doing their regular physical activity with the age gap pf nine years, from 15 to onward 65.

The male who had age between 15 to 24 had 52.8 percentage of doing their work. Furthermore, its percentage decreased relatively with the age group 25 to 34 had 42.2 and 39.5 percentage had people of age group between 35 to 44. Men having age group between 45 to 54 had percentage 43.1 and it increased slightly with 45.1 percentage between people of 55 to 64. However, male who were 65 and over had 46.7 percentage doing their regular physical activity.

Female had relatively higher percentage then male in all age groups. Female who had age between 15 to 24 had 47.7 percentage, the only time when male percentage were higher than female. Meanwhile, as the age gap increased by nine years, the number of females also increased with 48.9% between age group 25 to 34, 52..5% between age group 35 to 44. While, 45 to 54 age group of females had higher percentage among all of about 53.3% which decreased slightly to 53% of having age group of 55 to 64. However, the people who were 65 and over had equal percentage of about 47.1 in females and 46.7 in males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the data. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the general higher participation of females and the specific age-related patterns. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; you stated that young males had a higher percentage than females, but the data shows this is only true for the 15-24 age group. Additionally, there are some minor inaccuracies in reporting the figures, such as the claim that the 45-54 age group was the highest for females, which is correct, but the comparison between genders could be more precise. Overall, the main features are well-selected and reported.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on male and female data respectively. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore', 'However', and 'Meanwhile', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or repetitive, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'the age gap of nine years', which does not accurately describe the age categories provided in the chart. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the data sets, contributing to a coherent overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends and comparisons effectively. You use terms like 'percentage', 'decreased', 'increased', and 'regular physical activity' correctly. However, there is some repetition of basic structures and occasional word-choice errors, such as 'doing their work' instead of 'participating in physical activity'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and use more precise collocations when describing statistical data. The spelling is generally accurate, though there are minor slips like 'then' instead of 'than'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'female had relatively higher percentage' (missing articles) and '52..5%' (typo). Subject-verb agreement is sometimes inconsistent, and the use of articles is often missing before nouns. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for articles and pluralization would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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