Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the trend of physical exercises being followed by different age groups of Australian men and women in 2010.

Generally, men in group of 15 to 24 years old were observed to be more concerned towards physical fitness in comparison with other age groups. In contrast, physical exercise was practiced mostly by group of women of age 55 to 64 years old.

In terms of Australian men, young boys of 15 and 24 age were found be mostly performing exercise with 52.8% of involvement, followed by group of 65 and over after that 55 to 64 years old group with 46.7% and 45.1% involvement. Conversely, 35 to 44 years aged men rarely participate in that while 25 to 34 and 45 to 54 also lower interest in exercise.

In women perspective,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response is incomplete, as it cuts off abruptly after the introductory sentence for the women's data. Because the task is unfinished, it fails to provide a full overview or report on all the data presented in the chart. While the initial summary and the analysis of the men's data are relevant, the lack of a conclusion and the missing information regarding the female demographic significantly impact the task achievement. To improve, you must ensure you cover all categories provided in the prompt and complete your analysis within the word count requirement. The current length of 134 words is below the 150-word minimum, which negatively affects the overall score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows some attempt at logical organization by separating the data into paragraphs for men and women. However, the abrupt ending prevents a coherent flow of information. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'In terms of', and 'Conversely' are used to link ideas, which is a positive feature. However, the paragraphing is incomplete, and the lack of a concluding summary makes the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, ensure that each paragraph is fully developed and that the essay concludes with a clear summary of the main trends observed in the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, though it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Phrases like 'more concerned towards physical fitness' and 'mostly performing exercise' are understandable but slightly unnatural. There is some repetition of the word 'group' and 'involvement'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and synonyms to describe statistical trends, such as 'participation rates', 'proportion', or 'engaged in'. The range is currently limited, and the errors in word choice occasionally make the writing feel less professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'young boys of 15 and 24 age were found be mostly performing' contains missing prepositions and awkward phrasing. Additionally, 'In women perspective' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'From a female perspective'. There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy will help improve your score.

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